Heres a preview of my mother child story, my other story is saved to school so can't show you yet.
Here it is:
Above ground a woman silently sobbed. Her tears flowed easily from her eyes as she watched through her hands. Her once cream skin was now a chalky pale color. Her chocolate brown eyes showed a raw emotion of agony, and emptiness. Like the thing that matter most to her had been ripped right out of her reach, because it had. The wind blew right onto her face harshly; scattering her tears, and letting her black hair blow in a frenzy behind her but she didn't care. She focused through blurry eyes below her. Below the ground, a small casket was being put down. It's fine mahogany wood sullied by the cold hard dirt in which it was being buried.
The woman wanted nothing more desperately then to rip her shoulders away from her husband's firm hands and stop the men from burying the baby,her baby. Above her, the sky formed giant clouds that looked just as angered and heartbroken as she was, if that was possible. The clouds mixed with different shades of black and grey, and covered the sky. Maybe the heavens, too weeped over the loss of such a pure child. The women looked up to it as if praying to god that this was a horrible nightmare. Praying at the very least, that she was asleep herself under ground, and her little girl was the one watching her being buried. But when she looked to the now forming pile of dirt, she knew it wasn't so. The woman cried even harder wanting nothing more then to undig the pile, rip open that wretched coffin, and grab her now lifeless little girl and hold her in her arms one more time. Instead, she sunk to the ground on her knees and grasped the cold hard soil in her hands making nail marks in the ground as she sobbed harder. Her baby was gone.
Comments and Critque would be helpful








--
Be you because you are beautiful
--
If you ask for a pro Pysco, ask for me, Ill be there by tommarow
Lmao, I bet you'll never guess who this is! Bahahahaha!
<3 you,
Misty
--
If you ask for a pro Pysco, ask for me, Ill be there by tommarow
--
GSR
Proud NARUTARD!
*Demihero
~kikikun
~Amanda-Joy
~Bagatelle
~jc25813
~SakuNaru~antisasusakufc~SasuNaruSaku~NejiHina
--
If you ask for a pro Pysco, ask for me, Ill be there by tommarow
--
GSR
Proud NARUTARD!
*Demihero
~kikikun
~Amanda-Joy
~Bagatelle
~jc25813
~SakuNaru~antisasusakufc~SasuNaruSaku~NejiHina
--
If you ask for a pro Pysco, ask for me, Ill be there by tommarow
--
GSR
Proud NARUTARD!
*Demihero
~kikikun
~Amanda-Joy
~Bagatelle
~jc25813
~SakuNaru~antisasusakufc~SasuNaruSaku~NejiHina
--
My Avatars by ~Left4DeadHunterFan
Previous Page12345...Next Page